http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/ St. Mary's County Writers' Group Mon, 23 Nov 2009 16:16:51 GMT DeeRhine http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1182 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1182 Ah okay, well, I may have given too much information on the next few. Sorry about that. Just let me know and as I said, I can adjust my "thoroughness". :) Dee Sun, 22 Nov 2009 19:12:49 GMT julie schlomer http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1181 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1181 THIS is what I'm looking for!! THank you. I want to know what your initial reaction is when you read it. I'll be rewriting for sure :)   THANKS! ... From: Sun, 22 Nov 2009 19:11:37 GMT julie schlomer http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1180 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1180 Hi Dee- I see that you have feedback but I haven't read them yet. The type of information I am looking for is pretty basic to start - what does it read like, Sat, 21 Nov 2009 20:45:36 GMT DeeRhine http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1179 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1179 The Shively plantation was at least eight miles south of the Dunkirk plantation. Kian knew this because he had heard the Dunkirks talk about the Shively Sat, 21 Nov 2009 20:35:35 GMT DeeRhine http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1178 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1178 Virginia - 1673 He never found his wife or children. In his heart, he hoped they were still in Ireland. It kept him going, thinking they were free, even though Sat, 21 Nov 2009 20:32:54 GMT DeeRhine http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1177 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1177 The rocking sensation and stench of urine were the first things he noticed upon waking. He squinted and felt a throbbing above his left eye. His hands were Sat, 21 Nov 2009 20:30:44 GMT DeeRhine http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1176 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1176 Julie, Ok, I see that these three were probably unfinished pieces, so maybe my feedback was premature? If it was, just tell me and I'll be sure to adjust the Sat, 21 Nov 2009 19:12:19 GMT DeeRhine http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1175 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1175 Hi Julie, What I liked: Your idea never wandered. You stayed on topic throughout the entire piece. Your points are well made and I agree with them [although Sat, 21 Nov 2009 18:59:08 GMT DeeRhine http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1174 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1174 Julie, GREAT! That's okay if you've never read Paranormal fiction. Your crits were RIGHT ON! I just need to know (and I'll usually specify) where it stumps the Sat, 21 Nov 2009 18:53:54 GMT DeeRhine http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1173 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1173 Julie, Without being entirely sure what kind of feedback you want, I'll give you generic suggestions. Hope that is ok. What I liked: Your style was good. The Sat, 21 Nov 2009 16:46:43 GMT DeeRhine http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1172 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1172 Julie, I've downloaded all of your files and will give what feedback I can. Is there anything in particular for which you wish me to look? (transitions from Sat, 21 Nov 2009 16:46:09 GMT DeeRhine http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1171 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1171 Kathi, I am not familiar with that. I do know that there is a reference book that is called "2009 Novel & Short Story Writer's Market (Novel and Short Story Sat, 21 Nov 2009 16:32:05 GMT DeeRhine http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1170 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1170 Sorry it's taken me a while to get back to you. I had my daughter's birthday to deal with among other things. But I really appreciate your thorough detail and Thu, 19 Nov 2009 23:43:12 GMT Kathleen Edwards http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1169 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1169 Hi I can't come to your group because of schedule conflicts and vision problems that preclude night driving, and anyway, I'm mostly doing poetry these days, Thu, 19 Nov 2009 13:52:56 GMT JulieS http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1168 http://groups.yahoo.com/group/stmaryscountywritersgroup/message/1168 So here's a little feedback for you. First of all, the flow is extremely good. Your attention to detail is excellent and helps me get a visual of what is